In order to get the scene layout correct, I took a look at the storyboard and created a rough layout of the scene based on the shots. Layout image shown below.
I would personally have added the General into the first few shots, as he's supposed to be introduced to the audience here, fighting zombies from his tank. I believe we could've added a shot or two between shot 2.3 and 2.4 focusing on the General and what's happening to the zombies outside.
What sequence of shots are your most favourite?
My favorite shots in this previz has to be the final two shots (2.8 and 2.9) where Dead Meat is running away from the burning town, gets the flashbacks, stops up and decides to go back.